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Wednesday, October 19, 2022
Hi Reader,
Brett here:
Did you ever notice how important it is to see the big picture and the details?
I imagine detectives excel at this.
The fictional Jessica Fletcher, for example, is an ideal detective because she astutely observes a crime scene from a distance and examines it up close (to solve murder mysteries and write them!):
Closer to home . . . I think of The Amazing Race, a tv show in which teams of 2 race around the world and compete in challenges specific to each local culture for a chance to win 1 million dollars.
At the thoughtful request of my daughter-in-law, Yukiho, I have applied to be on The Amazing Race with my son Baye.
Our chances of being chosen are slim, but I think it's worth a shot. Any opportunity to embark on a once-in-a-lifetime high-stakes romp of travel, adventure, and competitive intrigue with a dear loved one is too good to pass up!
For me, the show truly is amazing because it reflects the awe-inspiring mysteries of life: including stress, struggle, frustration, sorrow, pain, endurance, survival, hope, experience, wisdom, and joy.
ALSO: to win, you have to slow down enough to take in the big picture and the details before speeding up in precisely the right direction, toward success.
Oh β hey β fundraising is like that too!
If you're like most fundraisers, you're drafting your year-end fundraising appeal right now.
Before you sign off on a final draft, make sure you've set your appeal up for success. . .
Do some self-editing before you send your appeal.
Below are 2 approaches you can use to self-edit your work.
BIG PICTURE CHECKLIST: Can you honestly say YES to each of the following big-picture-level statements?
β You've presented a βhuman-sizeβ problem for the donor to solve.
β You've made sure your offer is specific, shows urgency, is expressed with a cost, and feels like a good value for the money.
β You've focused on outcomes, not processes or programs.
β You've told your supporters why their help is urgently needed right now.
β You've shown what will happen when they make a gift.
β You've expressed what's at stake if the problem is ignored.
β You've shared a simple story to emphasize the need.
β You've repeatedly asked for the gift throughout the message.
β You've told your supporters how to make a gift now.
If any of the above need work, go back and revise.
DETAILS CHECKLIST: Can you honestly say YES to each of the following details-level statements?
β You've replaced statistics with how the problem affects one person.
β You've deleted words that are not necessary.
β You've replaced weak verbs with strong ones.
β You've used contractions to help your writing sound friendlier.
β You've removed sentences the donor is likely to skip.
β You've purged the jargon and buzzwords.
β You've cut big words when there was an appropriate shorter word.
β You've broken long sentences into 2 or 3 shorter sentences.
β You've created transitions to help with the pacing and flow.
β You've varied paragraph lengths, keeping them to 5 lines or fewer.
If any of the above need work, go back and revise.
Once you've done all that: pour yourself a drink, kick back, and rest easy. You are good to go!
For your brain, heart, and funny bone...
Until next time: May you always keep in sight the big picture and the little details so your supporters can fully appreciate your good cause and the urgent need that together you can meet.
We'll see you in your inbox soon!
All our best,
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